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Lavinia Lavender ([identity profile] lavinialavender.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] original_lavi 2009-02-10 10:36 pm (UTC)

Ha, I was hoping I could excuse myself from a lot of the messiness with my "omg I just wrote it and read it once and was really distracted." No, I'm still glad you pointed those things out.

Yeah, I'm aware the beginning needs a lot of work, it isn't really writing at all. It was just like I was starting another entry. Like I said, it took me a while to get into the feel of what I wanted to write. I'll go back and re-write it when I seriously tackle it again.
(Actually, I might go back now and edit the first few lines, since they are so jarring and I know it.)

And the line you quoted was the one I focused on the most after I woke up, so I would remember it after my second nap (when the story-essay-thing ends). I'm glad it was as good as I thought it was. The list of excuses I didn't have such hopes about; it was just in my head (like the rest), so I went with it.

If anything, it's just an exercise. Making myself write and all.

Thank you! ♥

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