I deeply admire the vaguely incisive dialogue of the first piece. I deeply admire the utter lack of dialogue in the last piece. I love the run-on quality of the middle piece and the blase with which it is treated, but there is something wrong with the verbs: they don't actually do anything, I think.
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Date: 2008-11-20 05:50 pm (UTC)