original_lavi

I had high hopes for this story; I thought I had a really spectacular idea for it, which is especially unusual since it was an idea for an original story. But as usual, I think I failed in my execution. It seems much shallower than it should be. The ending is dead corny and the only reason I don't change it to something else is because I think I still had a point there, and I'm not sure if it's so dead corny because of my own history with Harry Potter, and maybe it might work for someone who didn't know me. Who knows.  Also, it's worth noting that I can't remember the last time I wrote something in first person, so that was rather experimental as well.

Again, though, I would really appreciate feedback, specific comments on what isn't work and what does, however miniscule.

( The Good Kind of Voices )